Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?
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era, it is Add an article
the modern
debatable
topic that many famous Add an article
a debatable
personality
become a part of controversy all over the time because of money and fame. Change to a plural noun
personalities
That is
why they present a wrong example for youth. I strongly agree with Linking Words
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media
opens lots of gates to Use synonyms
become
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becoming
days
, Use synonyms
it
may Correct word choice
and it
ruins
the life of Change the verb form
ruin
youngster
.
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a youngster
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the media
media
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the media
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play
play's
a vital role they always Verb problem
play
shows
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show
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superstars'
superstar's
superstars
lifestyle Change noun form
superstars'
for earning
a high rating. They telecast small moments which are not so important and entertaining. Change preposition
to earn
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few
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a few
days
back Use synonyms
media
channels Use synonyms
shows
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showed
comparison
between Will Add an article
a comparison
the comparison
smith
and Shahrukh Capitalize word
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khan
houses which would be not so important for anyone, Capitalize word
Khan
whereas
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media
is not Correct article usage
the media
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show
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buy
something expensive for them to just show off, people just Change the verb form
buys
became
crazy Wrong verb form
become
for
it and starts Change preposition
about
talk
about Change the form of the verb
talking
there
luxurious life.
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their
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, technology plays a very important role Linking Words
for
celebrities Change preposition
in
to become
more famous. Sometimes they are not too Wrong verb form
becoming
much
talented but with the help of new Rephrase
very
genration systens
they change Correct your spelling
generation systems
voice
and appearance which look very Correct pronoun usage
their voice
atractive
even without Correct your spelling
attractive
there
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their
hardwok
. Correct your spelling
hard
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now a
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nowadays
days
many singers change Use synonyms
there
echo Correct your spelling
their
with
taking help from new Change preposition
by
softwares
for the good quality of the recording but when they perform in live shows they get embarrassed. Correct your spelling
software
Furthermore
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days
people are Use synonyms
also
using many Linking Words
application
in which they can add videos and get famous for various reasons and they can earn name and fame without doing any hard work.
In conclusion, Fix the agreement mistake
applications
new
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the new
genration
should not follow Correct your spelling
generation
influencer
because of Fix the agreement mistake
influencers
there
fame Correct your spelling
their
instead
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this
they should see Linking Words
there
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their
hardwork
and some Correct your spelling
hard work
are become
famous without Change to the active voice
become
have become
hardwork
, it put Correct your spelling
hard work
bad
impact on Correct article usage
a bad
youngster
.Fix the agreement mistake
youngsters
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