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Band 5.5

Some individuals argue people should buy only local products rather than foreign products. do you agree or disagree

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It is argued that
consumer
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consumers
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 should only buy
products
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 from
the
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apply
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domestic
producer
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producers
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 compared
to
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than
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the
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apply
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international
products
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. I
compeletely
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completely
 disagree with
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 view as
worlwide
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worldwide
products
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 are cheaper and it has good
quality
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 compared to the locals. First and foremost, global
products
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offers
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offer
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 a cheap price
because
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because of
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 the advancement of
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production
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the production
a production
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 system. The international producers
has
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have
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 an advantage in technological implementation in the industry, which sometimes the local producer could not meet the same conditions.
This
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 affects the total
production
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 outcome
while
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also
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save
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saving
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 the
production
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 cost.
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, Adidas is a popular
shoes
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shoe
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 brand, they implemented a
production
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 innovation in packaging systems so they can boost the
shoes
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shoe
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production
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 from 2000 to 5000 shoes per day.
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, they could
produced
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produce
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 more
products
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 and sell
with
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at
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 an affordable price.
Furthermore
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, imported
products
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also
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are also
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 well-known
with
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for
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its
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their
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production
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quality
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.
This
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 make customer
have
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a
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apply
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trust
with
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apply
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the brand so they
could do
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can
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the
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apply
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repeat order.
Moreover
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, global
products
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also
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provides
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provide
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 a service guarantee so the buyer could feel
save
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safe
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 when something happens.
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, Samsung is one of the best mobile phone
brand
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brands
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 in the world, people put
a
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apply
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trust
to
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in
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 their
products
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 because of
built
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the built
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quality
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 and the access
of
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to
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 after-sales services.
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, Samsung could maintain their customer by serving the qualities for them. In
a
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conclusion, it is important to promote local
products
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 to the market.
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, I disagree if people only buy local
products
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 because foreign
products
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 could
also
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 offer
quality
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products
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with
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at
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 affordable
price
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prices
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 which
beneficial
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is beneficial
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 for the customer.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure your essay has a clear, logical structure by organizing your ideas into well-defined paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, supported by relevant explanation or examples.
coherence cohesion
Strive to include both an introduction and conclusion that clearly express your position on the topic. Make sure your conclusion summarizes your main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples or reasons. The examples should be relevant and enhance your argument, rather than simply fill space.
task achievement
The response completes the task, however, for a higher score, offer a more nuanced argument acknowledging potential benefits of local products as well, even if ultimately favoring international products.
task achievement
Clarify and develop your ideas to ensure that your essay communicates your position comprehensively. You could enhance the complexity of your argument by comparing and contrasting aspects rather than presenting a one-sided view.
task achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points, ensuring they are relevant and well-integrated into your argument without making broad generalizations.
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