The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (Co2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.
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The line graph demonstrates the average carbon dioxide ( CO2 )
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each
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individual in three countries ( the
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United Kingdom
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, Sweden, Italy and Portugal ) produced in the period of 40 years.
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of the United
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Kingdom
always had the most emission of CO2 and Portuguese citizens released the lowest amount of it
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throughout
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course of time . In 1967 the United
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was the main source of CO2 generation, generating about 11 metric
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Sweden’s emissions
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9 metric
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Italy and Portugal released CO2
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under 5 metric
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. Almost twenty years later
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Italy overtook Sweden in emissions of CO2. Between 1977 and 1997, emissions of CO2 in Sweden dramatically dropped to reach 7 metric
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Italy slightly increased and reached around 7 metric
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, Portugal had the same changes as Italy and gradually rose to about 3 metric
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, generating CO2 in the United
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saw only a small decrease to approximately 9 metric
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon dioxide emissions
  • per person
  • United Kingdom
  • Sweden
  • Italy
  • Portugal
  • graph
  • compare
  • average
  • increase
  • decrease
  • trend
  • peak
  • decline
  • years
  • period
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