Some people think they have the right to use as much fresh water they want, but others believe government should control the use of freshwater as it is a limited resource.

In our modern life, the majority of individuals prefer to use as much as fresh water
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other
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point out that local government
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ought
sought
to control the utility of potable water since it is
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resource. In my point of view, human beings need to protect the need to protect irrecoverable
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Structure
Your essay needs improvement in overall structure. It lacks a clear introduction and conclusion, which are crucial for framing your argument and summarizing your viewpoint. Make sure to open with a sentence that clearly states the topic and ends with a sentence that summarizes your main points.
Grammar & Cohesion
Some sentences contain grammatical errors or awkward phrasing, which disrupt the flow and clarity of your argument. It's important to use a variety of cohesive devices and paragraphing to help the reader understand the progression of your ideas.
Content & Examples
You should provide more detailed examples and explanations to support your argument. Use specific, relevant examples to illustrate your points and make your essay more convincing.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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