The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007
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The line graph highlights data
conserning
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concerning
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of spreads which were consumed over a twenty-six-year period between 1981 and 2007.
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, it can be seen that there was a negligible upward trend of Low fat and reduced spreads
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the dispensing of Margarine and Butter declined strikingly over the period in question. Another interesting point is that the Butter was the most popular in 1981.
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, until 1996 there was
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distributed
Low fat
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and reduced spreads. Looking at the details, as regards Butter, after growing slightly just under 160
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reached a peak. At
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point, there was a striking slump to 50
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in 2007. If we look at Margarine having slightly dropped from 90
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in 1986 and
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there was a peak time
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100
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from 1991 to 1996 after which was
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dramatically.
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to Low fat and reduced spreads, not having seen until 1996, the production surged rapidly to just over 80
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, after which point it was a dip marginally to 70
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in 2007.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words grams with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • spreads
  • increased
  • decreased
  • stable
  • significantly
  • approximately
  • per capita
  • remarkable
  • peaked
  • experienced
  • started
  • remained
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