Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
I think that the issue
about
whether all Change preposition
of
students
must be required to wear school
uniform
is Fix the agreement mistake
uniforms
the
one Correct article usage
apply
that is
open for debate. Some people think that all students
must wear the school
uniform
. However
, others think that students
should decide what to wear to school
themselves. Personally, I believe that students
should wear what they like. For several reasons, which I will mention bellow
, I think that Correct your spelling
below
school
uniforms
should not be required to wear at high school
.
First of all, if students
do not have school
uniforms
they can wear what they like to school
. Personally, I like to wear cloth
Correct your spelling
clothes
that
is
comfortable. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Also
, I am a female and I like to wear jeans and shorts, and as far as I know
girls must wear skirts as a part of their Add a comma
know,
uniform
. I think many female students
will agree with me that jeans much
more comfortable Add a missing verb
are much
then
skirts.
Second of all, I believe that Replace the word
than
school
uniforms
must not cause any discomfort. For example
, some international students
will find unacceptable
Correct pronoun usage
it unacceptable
wearing
some of the Change the verb form
to wear
uniform
's parts.
I am from Russia. When I was a student of the elementary school
I was required to wear the school
uniform
that included a dark blue skirt and a white or light blue shirt. I did not like it very much, because I did not like the fact that all students
were dressed in the same color
. We dressed the same way and we were permitted to wear any adornments. Personally, I did not like the fact that girls always had to wear skirts and it was not convenient Change the spelling
colour
especially
in cold weather.
In short, I think that Add the comma(s)
, especially
students
should wear to school
what they want. Otherwise
, if a high school
requires students
to wear school
uniforms
, I think that uniforms
must be comfortable for all students
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Support your main points with a variety of examples instead of focusing on a single personal anecdote. Broaden your support to include other perspectives or possible counterarguments to strengthen your position.
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