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Band 7

You are working for a company. You need to take some time off work and want to ask your boss about this. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to take time off work and how long you need explain how you will keep up-to-date while you are away suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

Dear Mr. Parker, I hope
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 a family event that I must attend. The family celebration is organized because my father is getting his retirement from the army
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 upcoming Tuesday, 20th May. All of our relatives and friends are coming to celebrate my father's successful journey; my father is unaware of it. So, I’m arranging
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 party on my own, and I need a full week off from 13th May to 19th May because I need enough time to decide the venue and theme of the party. I want to make it more special for him by inviting his seniors, and I am especially visiting his coworkers to give them an invitation. In my absence, Jack Miller, one of our staff members in my department, will take care of
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, and he will help me out in completing the pending work.
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, I’m Working from home, in case he needs me. After my time off, I will ensure that I finish the pending work as soon as possible
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 if he is not able to cover it. Thank you for considering my request, and I hope you understand my situation. Yours sincerely, Kiranpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
While your overall structure is clear, there are some minor issues such as mixing different ideas in a few sentences, which can slightly affect the clarity. Consider separating thoughts into distinct paragraphs to improve readability.
task achievement
Your request was stated clearly and appropriately. However, adding a brief line about your commitment to your responsibilities could make your case stronger.
task achievement
You provided a clear reason for your time off and the specific dates, which shows good task completion.
coherence and cohesion
Your polite tone and format are appropriate for a formal letter, contributing to a respectful and professional impression.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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