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The maps below shows an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

The maps below shows an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
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The maps below illustrate Norbinton’s current industrial zone and its planned development in the future.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
town
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 is planning to turn into a suburban area with many facilities.
In addition
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,
according to
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 the plan, all the factories are going to be removed, making way for new housing and buildings
At the end
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 of the
road
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 to the east
side
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, the new school will be constructed, replacing the factory that was there.
Moreover
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, the new alley to the north
side
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 is going to be erected on
this
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road
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, making way for a newly established playground. Looking to the central
side
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 of the
town
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, new shops, and a medical
center
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centre
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 will be built
to
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on
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 the west-south and south-eastern
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side
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sides
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 of the central zone. Heading to the western
side
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 of the
town
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, a new
road
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 is planned to be established, making way for the industrial area.
In addition
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, the
road
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 will be constructed to the north
side
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 of the
town
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, connecting a river with the central
side
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 and having a housing zone along it.
Moreover
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, the new breach is planned to be manufactured
at the end
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 of the
road
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 joining
a
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farmland and the newly built housings on the other
side
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 of the river with the main part of the
town
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, in addition, moreover".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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