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The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.

The chart below shows literacy rates in several different countries around the world.
#literacy #rates #countries #world
The given table illustrates the
percentatage
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percentage
 of
aduly
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adult
 literacy rates of men and women in country.The
overall
 table depicts that
male
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the male
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 fraction is more in number. Well in these
countries
 the majority is the male
litercay
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literacy
 was most
countries
 in the of C and D with about 93%-99%.
Also
there
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female literacy
are
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 almost lying to the range same as C and D between 87%-99%. As a whole
countries
 C and D the male and female ratio is almost the same
between
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and have a population of about 90%-99%.
On the other hand
countries
 A,
B
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and B
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have a slight decrease in the
litercay
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literacy
 rate
compare
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 to the
countries
 of Cand
D.Meanwhile
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D. Meanwhile
, there is a difference in the female rates for
appproximately
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approximately
 about 30%-32%.Altogether the total literacy rates of
countries
 A and B
is
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are
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 between 47%-52%. In a nutshell, the world
poulation
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population
 for all
the
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four
countries
 is about 87% in which the male consists about 77% and
female
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females
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 about 87%.
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