The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the number of overseas visitors to lakes, coasts and mountains in each country in Europe from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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, all three
touristic
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tourist
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attractions have an increasing tendency during
twenty-year
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the twenty-year
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research period. The number of guests who visited the coast in 1987 decreased from 40000 to approximately 35000 by 1992.
However
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, in the next 15
years
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years,
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the sum of tourists increased steadily and reached nearly 75000
foreigner
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foreigners
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by 2007. Looking through mountain data,
they
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there
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were only 20000 participants who took part in
trip
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a trip
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in
the
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apply
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1987 and by 1997
level
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the level
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of tourists
stay
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stayed
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constant
to
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until
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2002. By 2007, there were a few new challengers
joined
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who joined
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to
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apply
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mountain trips and they were around 35000.
On the other hand
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, lake trips were not popular among
other
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the other
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two journeys. In 1987,
they
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there
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were just a few participants (10000 individuals) compared to the mountains and coasts.
However
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, a lot of tourists
were
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admired
by
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apply
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the lakes in the next 15 years (1987-2002) and the sum of visitors increased
as
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speedfully to about 75000 people. Despite
this
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, between 2002 and 2007 the visitor statistics diminished to 50000 humans.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Significant
  • Trends
  • Comparative analysis
  • Peak
  • Trough
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Steady
  • Surge
  • Plummet
  • Consistency
  • Highlight
  • Reinforce
  • Data representation
  • Time frame
  • Subject matter
  • Overseas visitors
  • Tourism promotion
  • Transportation
  • Accommodation facilities
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