The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of overseas visitors to lakes, coasts and mountains in each country in Europe from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
, all three touristic
attractions have an increasing tendency during Replace the word
tourist
twenty-year
research period.
The number of guests who visited the coast in 1987 decreased from 40000 to approximately 35000 by 1992. Add an article
the twenty-year
However
, in the next 15 years
the sum of tourists increased steadily and reached nearly 75000 Add a comma
years,
foreigner
by 2007. Looking through mountain data, Change to a plural noun
foreigners
they
were only 20000 participants who took part in Correct pronoun usage
there
trip
in Correct article usage
a trip
the
1987 and by 1997 Correct article usage
apply
level
of tourists Correct article usage
the level
stay
constant Wrong verb form
stayed
to
2002. By 2007, there were a few new challengers Change preposition
until
joined
Correct pronoun usage
who joined
to
mountain trips and they were around 35000. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, lake trips were not popular among other
two journeys. In 1987, Correct article usage
the other
they
were just a few participants (10000 individuals) compared to the mountains and coasts. Correct pronoun usage
there
However
, a lot of tourists were
admired Unnecessary verb
apply
by
the lakes in the next 15 years (1987-2002) and the sum of visitors increased Change preposition
apply
as
speedfully to about 75000 people. Despite Change preposition
apply
this
, between 2002 and 2007 the visitor statistics diminished to 50000 humans.Submitted by weronol600 on
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