The graph below shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012

The graph below shows the number of boys and girls playing sport in an English town in 2012
The bar graph illustrates the
number
of
boys
and
girls
playing 6 types of sports in a town in a single year.
Overall
,
boys
prefer tennis and
football
the most.
On the other hand
,
girls
love to play badminton & swimming mostly.
Hockey
is the least famous sport in the town. Specifically,
football
is the most famous sport for
boys
which shows the highest value, 60.
Also
, nearly 50
boys
played tennis which was the second highest. Less
boys
played badminton and
hockey
which shows the
number
30 or below. In
football
, the difference between the
number
of
boys
and
girls
is the highest; 60
boys
played it
whereas
girls
played only 20.
On the other hand
, about 90
girls
enjoyed swimming and badminton of which 50 went swimming. Only 50 people went for cycling,
football
and
hockey
.
Hockey
shows the least
number
, 10. From the graph, we can
also
see that
boys
played sport more than
girls
by
number
in 2012.
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