The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below show the number of visitors to two cities in a given year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The trends illustrate information about the amount of tourists who
visted
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visited
Caribbean
island
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islands
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in a period of 7 years from 2010 to 2017.In overview,
all
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millions of guests
such
as those who stayed on
cruise
ships
,
island
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islands
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and total experienced an increase from the beginning until the end of the period. To start with,
vistors
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visitors
who lived on
cruise
ships
in 2010, there were about 0.25
million
and increased to 0.5 in one year
while
,
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those who were staying on
island
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the island
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remained at 0.75
million
from 2010 to 2011.
Furthermore
, travellers on
cruise
ships
examined a fluctuation between 2011 and 2013,
whereas
a sharp growth
was occurred
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occurred
has occurred
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on
island
dwellers with approximately 0.75m and
also
remained constant increase to 2015. To add on,
total
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the total
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started at a higher level above others at 1
million
and
also
hitting
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hit
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the maximum number of all
vistors
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visitors
which was at 3.5m in the whole period.
Moreover
,
total
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the total
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amount of humans
stayed
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who stayed
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on running boats
were
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was
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almost two
million
,
however
, the least were
that one
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those
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who were living on
island
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the island
an island
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.
Lastly
,
vistors
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visitors
lived
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living
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on
cruise
ships
surpassed human beings on
island
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the island
an island
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between 2015 and 2016 and the lowest point
is
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was
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shown in 2012 by
cruise
ships tourist
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ship tourists
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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