The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of the day working adults spent doing different activities in a particular country in 1958 and in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts illustrate the distribution of
time
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that adults spent on various activities in a country in 1958 and 2008.
Overall
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, it is apparent that the
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spent on working, relaxing,
traveling
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to work, and other leisure activities or playing sports has significantly increased,
while
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the
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spent on sleeping and going out with friends or family has decreased. In 1958, work occupied the largest proportion of
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, accounting for more than one-third of the total
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.
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, it increased
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in 2008, reaching almost half the total
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. The
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spent
on
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working, relaxing at home, and
traveling
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constituted only a small fraction, but it increased to 13% and 8%, respectively. The
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spent on other interests or playing sports observed a minor increase of 2%.
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, the
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spent
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sleeping constituted a significant proportion of 32%, but it markedly decreased to one-fourth. In comparison, the
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spent with friends and family decreased considerably from almost 20% to under one-tenth.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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