The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The given bar graph
illustrate
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illustrates
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about
total
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a total
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of people and
proportion
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the proportion
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of
wealth
in several countries; which are North
America
, China, India, Europe, Africa, Latin
America
and
Carabean
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Caribbean
, Rich
Asia
Pacific and Other
Asia
Pasific
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Pacific
. The units are, measured in percentage for both
population
and
golbal
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global
wealth
in every
country
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that three nations; North
America
, Europe, and Rich
Asia
Pasific
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Pacific
, have a bigger global
wealth
compared with the
population
.
On the contrary
, the rest of
other
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the
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countries, have a smaller global
wealth
than
its
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their
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citizens. In terms of the biggest global
wealth
country
, which is North
America
, it had approximately 34 per
cent
of
global
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the global
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world with 5 per
cent
of
population
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the population
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. The figure
of
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for
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Europe
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Europe's
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wealth
stand
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stands
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at
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in
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the second position, with exactly 30 per
cent
and the
population
just
a
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apply
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half
from
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of
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it.
Subsequenly
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Subsequently
, Rich
Asia
Pasific
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Pacific
global
wealth
, it has about 10 per
cent
and the
population
one
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is one
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point lower than North
America
.
Regarding the
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The
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most populous
country
,
which
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apply
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is China with nearly 25 per
cent
compared with all
country
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countries
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. China and Other
Asia
Pasific
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Pacific
have the same number of global
wealth
with only three per
cent
.
However
, the percentage of
population
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the population
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in Other
Asia
Pasific
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Pacific
and India both at precisely 15 per
cent
. Meanwhile Africa, with only 10 per
cent
of
population
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the population
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has the same
number of
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apply
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global
wealth
of
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as
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India at 1 per
cent
.
Lastly
, Latin
America
and
Carabean
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Caribbean
only have a small gap, with 8 per
cent
population
and 2 per
cent
bellow with the global
wealth
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words wealth, america, asia, pasific, population, country, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • global population
  • distribution of wealth
  • percentages
  • region
  • Asia
  • Africa
  • Europe
  • North America
  • South America
  • Oceania
  • disparity
  • account for
  • follow
  • despite
  • vary
  • demonstrate
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