You attended a meeting last week but you are not happy with the hotel which you stayed in. Write a letter to the organizer who hotel for you. In your letter, you should tell: (a) what the problems were (b) what you didn't like about the hotel (c) what do you want organizer to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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letter to complain because

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am not happy about the

hotel

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you booked

last

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week.

Although

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you booked

five

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star

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five-star

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hotel

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, but

service

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hotel

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is very bad.

First,

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have

problem

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a problem

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when

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want to check in. I

want

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wanted

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non

smoking

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non-smoking

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room

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, but he gave me

smoking

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a smoking

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room

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Last

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, my

room

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does

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not

clean

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cleaned

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cleaning

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the cleaning

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service

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Therefore

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am very

disappointted

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disappointed

with

this

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service

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hotel

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. I do not like

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service

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the service

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this

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of this

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hotel

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Service

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's receptionist is not welcome, and he

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does

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not smile when

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come. I

also

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do not like the cleaning

service

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because he

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does

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not clean my

room

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, so

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felt uncomfortable when

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want to rest in the night. I do not want

this

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happen

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to happen

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again

with

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me, so you must

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apply

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check again about the

hotel

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that you want to

booked

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book

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. You do not need to

booked

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book

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five star

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five-star

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hotel

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because

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just want to feel comfortable when

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want to sleep. I hope

this

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happens like

this

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is not

come

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happen

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again for me. Thank you Yours faithfully, Andrianto Raharja

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coherence cohesion

Ensure that each paragraph presents a separate point or issue, and use cohesive devices to link ideas effectively within and across paragraphs.

coherence cohesion

The letter's structure meets the requirements, with identifiable paragraphs for each problem. However, the transitions between points could be smoother, and sentences should be better linked to demonstrate clear logical progression of ideas.

task achievement

Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter; the informal language used is not suitable for a formal complaint letter.

task achievement

Make sure to address all parts of the prompt in equal measure and provide sufficient detail for each aspect. The causes for dissatisfaction, while mentioned, require further explanation and specificity.

coherence cohesion

Use a range of vocabulary and sentence structures to express your points clearly and concisely. Avoid repetition of words and phrases.

task achievement

Use proper letter formatting, including appropriate salutations and closings, to reflect a formal tone. Consider rephrasing the closing sentence for politeness and clarity.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

184 words

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You attended a meeting last week but you are not happy with the hotel which you stayed in. Write a letter to the organizer who hotel for you. In your letter, you should tell: (a) what the problems were (b) what you didn't like about the hotel (c) what do you want organizer to do.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Sources of electrocity in four countries 2003-2008

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programs. To what extent do you agree or disagree??

Due to success of convenience food and ready-made meals, we are failing to pass on adequate culinary skills to the next generation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

In some cultures, chldren are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?