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The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.

The graph below shows different sources of air pollutants in the UK from 1990 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. (20 mins.
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This
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 line graph above illustrates the major source of contaminated
air
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 rates, in
UK
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the UK
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,
consist
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consisting
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 of transport,
industry
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 and
households
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 between 1990 and 2005.
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, it can be seen that the amount of pollution from
industry
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 and
households
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 experienced a downward trend,
while
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 the transport showed an upward trend. In 1990, the
industry
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 was the most in emission of
air
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 pollutants with almost 6
million
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tonnes
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. The transport and
households
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were start
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started
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in
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at
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 the same level at 1
million
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tonnes
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. When
count
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counted
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 together, the total
air
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 pollution
were
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was
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 around 7
million
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tonnes
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.
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, after
that
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that,
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 the total amount of
air
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 contaminants steadily decreased and slumped to 4
million
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tonnes
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 in
year
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the year
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 1999.
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 is because the
industry
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 gradually reduced the quantity of pollutants emission, from 6 declined to about 3
million
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tonnes
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, not only
industry
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 the
households
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also
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 showed
reduction
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a reduction
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.
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, the
transport’
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transport
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 pollutants emission still rose,
contrast
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in contrast
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 to
other
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others
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,
but
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in but
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 next 6 years, the amount of pollution approximately stayed at 3
million
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tonnes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, industry, households, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • air pollutants
  • emissions
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • fluctuate
  • trend
  • peak
  • drop
  • significant
  • legislation
  • technological advancements
  • comparative analysis
  • contributors
  • households
  • transport
  • industry
  • regulation
  • pattern
  • anomaly
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