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A university education is the key to getting a good job. For that reason, the government should provide enough money to the universities so everyone can get a degree for free. To what extent do you agree?

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Education
 plays a crucial role in
people
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 lives around the world
due to
 it provides
the
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employment. Many claim that
students
 can get
a
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better
work
 after finishing the
university
 pedagogy,
hence
,
collgege eduacation
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college education
 should be funded by the authority, and
as a result
, everyone
become
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becomes
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 a
degree
 holder. I strongly agree with
this
 statement because people pay
tax
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taxes
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 to the
government
.
This
 essay shall discuss it briefly
in
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for
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 the following reasons.
To begin
 with, the authority should provide
the
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free
university
education
 to all
while
 each and every person can obtain the chance to enrol the
degree
 courses. The
government
 collects
the
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 vast amount of lavy from their citizens, so, that amount should be satisfied for the public's fundamental
essential
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essentials
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such
 as
education
. For
exmaple
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example
,
in
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Sri Lanka provides
the
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free college
eduaction
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education
 to their citizens by the pupil's lavy, and
as a result
, the
degree
 holder ratio is increased
alongwith
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and
students
 can
employ
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 the better
position
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 with high earnings.
People
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People's
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 tax amount should be utilized to them with free fundamental needs in order to they can get all the basic benefits from the
government
.
Furthermore
,
degree
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the degree
a degree
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 is one of the vital
requirments
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requirements
 for getting a
job
 in
job
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the job
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 market around the world. Many
companie's
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companies
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requirments
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requirements
 from the
job
 applicant
is
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 they should complete their
university
 course because
university
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the university
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 is trained
students
 perfectly for
work
 by their syllabus and projects. So, the ruling
patry
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party
 should provide free pedagogy to all in order
to
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for to
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students
might
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get
a better
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better work
a better job
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work
 in the
job
 market.
For instance
, the Apple company's initial
requirements
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requirement
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 is the applicant should finish the
degree
 related to the technology courses,
besides
, the application will
reject
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the
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during the
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 preliminary interview stage. The
degree
 is the most vital aspect for getting employment, the
rulling
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ruling
 party should be provided the free
educations
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education
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 to all.
To conclude
,
the
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university
 instructions
is
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are
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 the key
for
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to
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 getting a good
job
 position in companies and organisations. The population pay more tax to the
government
 in different ways, so the authority should give
university
education
by
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apply
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without cost
alongwith
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along with
degree
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a degree
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 is
the
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 important
requirements
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requirement
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 for
the
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job
 applicants to
getting
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get
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a
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work
a job
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work
 in
job
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the job
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 market.
Hence
, I strongly agree with
this
 statement that the
rulling
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ruling
 party should be provided
the
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free college pedagogy to all.
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