With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?
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for their children. I completely agree with Capitalize word
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this
statement and this
essay will discuss the reasons behind the aforesaid issue.
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, regulation on connecting with
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to
internet
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the internet
because
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particular
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they are more conscious than minors. Add an article
the circumstance
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completly
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themselves
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, when a child click
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clicks
unknown
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Then
you
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your
such
as ID Number, Bank details, address etc can fall into the hand
of dangerous people.
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, many kids are directed by social media so ristriction
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restriction
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to try flying.
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the world
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and social media Correct your spelling
World Wide Web
platform
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platforms
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elders should restrict there
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their
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internet
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the internet
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number of Correct your spelling
predictable
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