With access to the internet and social media websites, many children are exposed to a number of dangerous situations. Adults should thus limit access to the internet for their children. Do you agree or disagree?

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era, social media plays a vital role and because of
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many
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are affected. Some
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parents should impose some
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for their children. I completely agree with
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, regulation on connecting
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should be set by parents
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the
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they are more conscious than minors.
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teenager
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do not
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know how they protect
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themselves
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, when a child
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on
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website which includes numerous viruses, these software viruses obtain personal data.
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personal information
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as ID Number, Bank details, address etc can fall into the
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of dangerous people.
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, many kids are directed by social media so
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restriction
should be put in place because nowadays there are many things which are coming
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wide web and it is not
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useful
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, sometimes they assume these all
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differently.
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, in Turkey, a child watched a video
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easilly
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easily
influenced by him.
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he thought he
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some special
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like flying and jumped from
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to try flying. In conclusion,
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everything that has been stated so far many youngsters are exposed to risky scenarios
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the
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easy
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world wide web
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and social media
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.
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elders should restrict
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to access
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the internet
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.
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, it is
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predictable
number of
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restriction
restrictions
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connection
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will increase in future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dangerous situations
  • limit access to the internet
  • inappropriate content
  • online predators
  • physical and mental health
  • monitoring and guiding
  • online safety
  • school curriculum
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