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The chart below shows the change in three different types of crime in Newport city center from 2003 to 2012

The chart below shows the change in three different types of crime in Newport city center from 2003 to 2012
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garph
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graph
 illustrates the change of different
crime
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 rates that took place in Newport
city
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 between the years 2003 to 2012.
The
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overall
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, burglary has the
most
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highest
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crime
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rate
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. In 2003, the
crime
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rate
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of
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bulgary
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Bulgaria
burglary
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 was about 33000 but gradually it increased
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upto
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up to
 38000.In 2008, it declined rapidly and the
rate
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 was around 12000
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then
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 it slightly increased to 1500 in 2009 and
remain
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remained
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 constant till the year 2012.
Meanwhile
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 car theft was about 27000 less than bulgary in 2003.In 2006, slightly decreased
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upto
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up to
 2000.There was
gradual
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 increase from
the
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apply
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2007 and it kept increasing till the year 2012 and reached
upto
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 2000 same as the
the
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crime
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rate
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 in the year 2003.
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roberry
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Roberry
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wate
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water
 was the least from car theft and
bulgary
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burglary
Bulgaria
bulgar
.In 2003 the
number of
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apply
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crime
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rates
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rate
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were
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 about 500.
Then
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 there was a marginal increase in 2005
from
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and from
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 there it
decreaed
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decreased
decreases
decreed
upto
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 500 which has the same
crime
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rate
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 that was in 2003. From 2003 there was an upward and downward fluctuation from the years 2008 to 2012 and
raeched
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reached
 till 15000.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, rate, upto with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "change" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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