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You were supposed to go on an interview in a few weeks, but you have since found out you cannot go on the date arranged.

#interview #weeks #date
Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to express my concerns about not being able to be interviewed on the date arranged. The reason I need to postpone
this
interview
 is that I had a traffic accident two days ago and had to be hospitalized for treatment. Because the
interview
 was on Tuesday, I was discharged from the hospital on Saturday
according to
 the doctor’s instructions. I would like to enquire as to whether there is any possibility of rescheduling the
interview
 to another day so that I can be interviewed. I would very much like to participate in
this
interview
 because it is a huge opportunity that I have for myself and my work. I prepare everything very well for
this
 important
interview
 and I hope to be able to do it. Thank you in advance for your assistance with
this
 matter. Yours faithfully, Le Huy Gia Hoang
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coherence cohesion
Your letter is lacking a clear logical structure, as it does not flow seamlessly from introduction to conclusion. An effective letter should have a clear opening statement, development of ideas, and a succinct conclusion. Make sure each paragraph has a clear purpose and that the paragraphs flow logically from one to the next, with appropriate use of transitional phrases.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are not effectively presented. It's crucial to begin with a clear purpose for writing and finish with a polite closure and a clear statement regarding the desire for a follow-up or a resolution to the issue.
coherence cohesion
The main points of the letter are present but could be better supported. Providing more details about the situation, including any documentation or evidence to support your case, would make your communication more convincing.
task achievement
While you did provide a response to the task, the response could be more complete. Be sure to address the task prompt fully, ensuring that all parts of the question are answered and that your response is expanded upon with sufficient detail.
task achievement
You have attempted to provide clear and comprehensive ideas, but they could be developed further. Elaborate on the importance of the interview and the preparation done, as well as the impact of the accident on your current situation, to create a more comprehensive letter.
task achievement
You've included some relevant information, like the reason for postponement and your eagerness to attend the interview. However, you should incorporate more specific examples or details, such as potential alternative dates and your commitment to the opportunity, to strengthen your request.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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