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The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The table shows the cost of water in 5 cities in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The given table presents the
water
charge
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charges
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 of
Australia
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Australian
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 cities including
Adelaide
,
Brisbane
,
Melbourne
,
Perth
 and
Sydney
.
Overall
, it can be seen the
expensive
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most expensive
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charge
 city
of
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for
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 individual
household
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households
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in
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 average is
Perth
, followed by
Sydney
whereas
 the cheaper city is
Melbourne
.
To begin
 with,
Sydney
 and
Brisbane
are
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have
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 the highest unit
price
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prices
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 of
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apply
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the
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apply
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water
 usage less than 125
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kiloliters
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kiloliter
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kiloliters
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at
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with
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at
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 $0.98 and $0.78 respectively in comparison,
Adelaide
 and
Perth
are
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have
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an equal
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equal
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an equal
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prices
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price
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prices
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of
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at
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of
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 $0.42.
However
,
Perth
 and
Adelaide
 increased unit
price
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prices
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 to $1.5 and $1.0
respective
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respectively
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 when usage over 125
kiloliter
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kiloliters
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along with
Brisbane
 increased by $0.03.
Morever
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Moreover
,
Sydney
 remains
unchange
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unchanged
 as same as
Melbourne
 at $0.78 per unit.
On the other hand
, the most expensive average payment of
water
charge
 is
Perth
 at $332 per house, followed by
Sydney
,
Adelaide
 and
Brisbane
 had similar
amount
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amounts
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 with $319, $312 and $310 respectively ,
however
,
water
charge
 in
Melbourne
 is the lowest-priced amount all cities.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, charge, adelaide, brisbane, melbourne, perth, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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