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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided two maps describe the development of Nelson's
city
 from 200 to now.
It is clear that
 the noticeable changes
of
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in
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 the
city
is
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are
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 more
construtions
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constructions
construction
 are built including living building, shopping
centre
 and restaurant.
To begin
 with, the
central
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centre
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 of the map is the
city
center
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centre
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 and there
have
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has
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 a new scheme for people
rent
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to rent
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bicycle
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bicycles
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. An old
market
 is relocated from the west to the east side of the
city
centre
 and became a covered
market
,
along with
 a new shop is opened
on
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 the place of
original
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the original
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market
. The original train station
located
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was located
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at
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 the right side and next to
old
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the old
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market
,
however
, it
is
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has been
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 moved to the north between
city
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the city
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centre
 and
university
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the university
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as well
as
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and
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 a train road
is
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was
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 constructed to
linked
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 with university and bike rental.
Furthermore
, a living building and a new shopping
centre
 are built next to the right and left of the college. On the
otherhand
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other hand
, a restaurant
and
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apply
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bars and clubs
on
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are
opened
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open
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 close to the river.
Moreover
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 the road above
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and bars is redesigned as a
side walk
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sidewalk
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.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, centre, market with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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