The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of business making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart presents data on the
proporsion
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proportion
of businesses making e-commerce purchases in
industry
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the industry
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in Canada from 2015 to 2019.
Overall
, the
percentage
of construction, wholesale and retail increased year
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year
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in
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2015 until 2019,
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, for retail in 2018
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same
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as
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the percentage
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retail
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of retail
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.
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, the manufacturing
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information and communications remained relatively up and down.
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information and communication
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percentage
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2015 to 2019. the
percentage
of construction and wholesale increased from 2015 until 2019 with around 20% until
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approximately
50%, and 40% to around 60%, respectively. Retail remained increasing from 2015 until 2018 with 30% up to nearly 60% and constant in 2019. The
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percentage
manufacturing
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experience fluctuated from 30% up to 50%
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2015 to 2016 and
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down to 455 and
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to 60% in 2019. The proportion
information
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and
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communication
communications
remained rise
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60% to 75% and
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decreased
70
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% in 2019.
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