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Dress code or uniforms are important in a company. Do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
Nowadays, in
this
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world
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world,
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 there are many
companies
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. even though from
the
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a
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 retail
company
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until
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to
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 a big
company
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. they have unique
for
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apply
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differences
with
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from
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 other
companies
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for example
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from
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apply
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the
dress
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 code or
uniform
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.
However
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,
i
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I
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 totally agree that uniforms are important in a
company
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 because
for
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of
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 knowing their
employee
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 every
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companies
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company
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.
this
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 essay will examine why
i
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I
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 agree with
this
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 statement.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with,
dress
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 code could be involved to
identic
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identify
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 what they profesional
there
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their
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 job.
for example
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,
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the doctor
a doctor
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doctor
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doctors
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 always
used
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wear
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the
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apply
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white
uniform
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 when they
doing
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do
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 activities at
hospital
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the hospital
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. not only doctor
,
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apply
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 but
also
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 teachers, polices and everything
their
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the
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 job they always
used
Verb problem
wear
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uniform
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a uniform
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 when they are working.
Body paragraph 2
Furthermore
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, the
employee
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 must not
thinking
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think
be thinking
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 about their work outfit if they
want
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want to
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 go to
office
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the office
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 because the memories
reminder
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remind
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used
Verb problem
them to wear
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 different
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uniform
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uniforms
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everyday
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every day
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. The
employee
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 could
be
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apply
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safe
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save
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 their money for the
dress
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 outfit.
for example
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,
everyday
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every day
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 the
company
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have done arrange
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has arranged
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 the condition
work
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of work
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 outfit every day.
Conclusion
in conclusion, the
company
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 have
rule
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a rule
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 for
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employee
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the employee
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 about the
uniform
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 or
dress
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 code
everyday
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every day
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 to
using
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use
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 by employees and could be unique
every
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for every
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Use synonyms
companies
Change to a singular noun
company
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.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
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Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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