With the development of online communication,people will neber be alone and will always be able to new friends. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Somt
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Some
people
claim that Online platforms have revolutionized the way we connect, allowing
people
to have more
friends
despite the distance.We can talk with everyone in the whole world and we can find like-minded individuals to be
friends
.I strongly believe that social has changed the way of chatting.In the forthcoming paragraphs,I shall expound my thoughts in detail.
To begin
with,online
messengers
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is a place where
people
can
chat
with
whoever
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they want and even they can find
people
who share
similiar
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similar
interests.So, they can discuss things in the world and share each other different thoughts and ideas.I would like to point out that talking with like-minded
person
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people
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and sharing your thoughts can reduce the feelings of
anxious
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and loneliness.What is more,it will give
more
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you more
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and more ideas, as you receive more information
from
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what your partner thinks.
For instance
,if you
a
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are a
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person who
enjoy
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listening to music,you can discover the other person with the same taste of music.
Then
, you can discuss the singer you love,what other songs you listen to and so on.I am sure that it can help you to be more happy and creative.
In addition
,social media is not only for making
friends
,internet messaging can give you an opportunity to connect with
may be
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maybe
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your parents,loved ones or close
friends
.You can not only talk with them through messages,video chats can be used too.Nowadays, video
chat
is available in many apps.
For example
,you
are study
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abroad
your
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country.far away from your parents.In order to,reduce the feelings of missing you talk with them whether through video
chat
or messages.
Finally
,social networks allow us to
chat
with other strangers
in
particular
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country,
even
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and even
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make them
your
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our
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friends
.With the
assist
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of
online
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an online
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network
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you can talk with your parents and
friend
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friends
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who are far away from you.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online communication
  • social media
  • global community
  • virtual interaction
  • connectivity
  • ubiquity
  • smartphones
  • isolation
  • superficial
  • alienation
  • meaningful relationships
  • face-to-face interaction
  • digital isolation
  • mental health
  • authenticity
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