The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by people in four different countries

The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by people in four different countries
The given table provides information on the daily
consumption
of three basic foods by the citizens of
four
different countries.
Overall
, one noticeable feature is Egypt consumes
highest
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amount of
calories
per
day
 out of all
four
countries.
Moreover
, Poland does not
consumes
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any
maize
. At over 2000
calories
per
day
, Egyptians have the highest
intake
of
calories
among all
four
nations,
along with
along with
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 the highest
consumption
of 
wheat
(1095
calories
/
day
). Their
consumption
of both
rice
501
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is 501
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calories
and
maize
578
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is 578
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calorie
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around
the
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half of their
intake
of
wheat
.
In
addition
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the largest
consumption
of
rice
is by
Cambodian
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Cambodians
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at 1445
calories
per
day
,
while
their
intake
of
calories
from
wheat
and
maize
were (18) and (103) respectively.
Moreover
,
Mexican
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get more of their
calories
from
Maize
(1083
calorie
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/
day
), and the
consumption
of
rice
and
wheat
accounted for 332
calories
daily. The most interesting feature is that Poland
consume
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the lowest amount of
calories
among all the
four
countries. The daily
intake
of (19
calorie
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calories
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/
day
) and (865
calorie
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calories
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/
day
) from
rice
and
wheat
respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with, moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, four, calories, day, maize, intake, wheat, rice, calorie with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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