The table below shows the consumption of three basic foods, rice, wheat and maize, by people in four different countries
The given table provides information on the daily
consumption
of three basic foods by the citizens of four
different countries. Overall
, one noticeable feature is Egypt consumes highest
amount of Change the article
the highest
calories
per day
out of all four
countries. Moreover
, Poland does not consumes
any Change the verb form
consume
maize
.
At over 2000 calories
per day
, Egyptians have the highest intake
of calories
among all four
nations, along with
along with
the highest Remove the redundancy
apply
consumption
of wheat
(1095 calories
/day
). Their consumption
of both rice
501
Add a missing verb
is 501
calories
and maize
578
Add a missing verb
is 578
calorie
around Change to a plural noun
calories
the
half of their Correct article usage
apply
intake
of wheat
. In
addition
the largest Add a comma
addition,
consumption
of rice
is by Cambodian
at 1445 Fix the agreement mistake
Cambodians
calories
per day
, while
their intake
of calories
from wheat
and maize
were (18) and (103) respectively. Moreover
, Mexican
get more of their Replace the word
Mexicans
calories
from Maize
(1083 calorie
/Fix the agreement mistake
calories
day
), and the consumption
of rice
and wheat
accounted for 332 calories
daily.
The most interesting feature is that Poland consume
the lowest amount of Change the verb form
consumes
calories
among all the four
countries. The daily intake
of (19 calorie
/Fix the agreement mistake
calories
day
) and (865 calorie
/Fix the agreement mistake
calories
day
) from rice
and wheat
respectively.Submitted by asoom on
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