the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in additon to English, in 2000 and 2010.

the charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in additon to English, in 2000 and 2010.
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The pie charts illustrate how much percentage of British
students
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of one university had
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the abiltiy
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ability
to speak other
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apart from English in England in the
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years
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2000 and 2010.
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, the proportion of
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who spoke additional
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went up by 2010, with Spanish being
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the most
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most
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commonly spoken in both
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the
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years
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. The
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who spoke Spanish apart from English accounted for the major portions in the
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years
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2000 and 2010, at 30% and 35% respectively. The
British
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number of British
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students
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who spoke additional
languages
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increased from 15% to 20 % in 10
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.
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, the portion of
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who spoke two other
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increased to 5% in 2010. The percentage of
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who only knew English in 2000 was 20 which declined by half in
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the next
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10
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, the
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who
also
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spoke French decreased from 15% in 2000 to 10% in 2010.
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,
portion
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the proportion
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of
German speaking
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students
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in
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the university
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university
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of England remained unchanged in
given
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the given
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10
years
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