Car ownership has increased so rapidly over past thirty years that may cities in the world are now on big traffic jam. How true do you think this statement is? How government should encourage people to reduce using their cars.
A rise in
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
cars
not only become
a cause of Correct subject-verb agreement
becomes
traffic
but also
make
Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
people
think about its reduction. Traffic
jam has proved that people
are getting more cars
in this
era and creating more obstacles in urban cities
, therefore
, I will shed some light on this
statement and give some solution, how government can tackle these problems.
To begin
with, traffic
has increased day by day as every household purchasing
a Wrong verb form
purchases
number
of cars
. To exemplify, people
neglect to be dependent on others and they desire new cars
to commute one
place to another, Change preposition
from one
therefore
, people
have to face traffice
in big Correct your spelling
traffic
cities
. For instance
, International Magazine has shown that 80% of families in urban cities
have three vehicles
in each house, which, as a result
, make
big Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
cities
crowded. Also
, bringing vehicles
on the road has become risky because Correct article usage
the accidents
accidents
rate is increasing every year Change the noun form
accident
due to
heavy traffic
.
To mitigate these problems, government's
intervention has become necessary as Correct article usage
the government's
people
would not consider reducing cars
without rules and regulations. First
step would be Change the article
The first
by imposing
Change preposition
to impose
tax
on buying Add an article
a tax
vehicles
and limiting car number
for every family in order to get good results. With Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
this
initiative, people
avoid purchasing more than one car and will learn to share one vehicle. Secondly
, some parking spaces should be paid so
that drivers feel hesitation to travel in Change preposition
for so
own
vehicleCorrect pronoun usage
their own
,
and use public transport Remove the comma
apply
istead
.
To put it in Correct your spelling
instead
nutshell
, I pen down saying that getting a Correct article usage
a nutshell
number
of cars
put
urban Wrong verb form
puts
cities
in worse
situation but if Add an article
a worse
Correct article usage
the goverment
goverment
Correct your spelling
government
take
some measures regarding Correct subject-verb agreement
takes
this
issue by implementing some Change preposition
of above
above given
rules Add a hyphen
above-given
then
we can protect our beautiful cities
from the crowed
of Correct your spelling
crowd
vehicles
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