More and more people are using the internet to do their tasks rather than doing in person. Does the advantage of this trend outweigh the disadvantege?

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work. In my view, the advantages
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information
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potential to outweigh the disadvantages of doing
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directly. It is undeniable that
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the
internet
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amount of
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the
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to their
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beneficial
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time compared to doing it directly which means they can finish the
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early. The reason is the
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algorithm that can simplify
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keyword
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that
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less time.
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a disadvantage
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using the
internet
while
doing a task. With a lot of
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the
internet
,
people
need to search the trusted
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. They need to read all of the content and
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the truth of the topic before using it for their
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have
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it shows
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limited access to
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finishing the
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way to solve the problem. In conclusion, I firmly believe that the opportunities offered by using
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to do
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which
provides
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a lot of
information
can make
people
finish their task easily.
However
, there is a slight
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when
people
doing
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tasks
such
as the source have been limited.
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people
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with
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other ways.
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the
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the advantages far outweigh the disadvantages.
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coherence cohesion
In your essay, the structure was somewhat recognisable, but paragraphing can be enhanced. Ensure clear separation of points into organised paragraphs, each addressing a singular aspect of the topic.
coherence cohesion
While an introduction and conclusion are present, they could be made more effective by clearly restating the question and summarising your argument in a more conclusive way. This helps in establishing a strong position throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
Your main points are generally relevant, but they could be better supported by specific examples and detailed explanations. Whenever you make a claim, follow it with concrete evidence or a scenario that vividly illustrates the point.
task achievement
You did complete the task; however, the response sometimes deviates from the central topic. Make sure to continually refocus on the main question and how exactly the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in your perspective.
task achievement
Your ideas were expressed, but sometimes lack clarity and do not form a comprehensive argument throughout the essay. Focus on developing your ideas more deeply and logically to enhance clarity and persuasiveness.
task achievement
Your use of specific examples is good but could be more effectively utilized to bolster your arguments. For each advantage or disadvantage you discuss, consider providing a concise, relevant example from real life or a hypothetical situation that clearly demonstrates the impact of the internet on task completion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
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