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Write a letter to your manager to nominate a person for best employee of the year award. Who is this person Why did you choose him? What is the characteristic of a good employee?

#manager #person #employee #year #award
Dear Sir or Madam, My name is
simran
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 and I am working as
early
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 childhood educator in your company. I am writing
this
 letter in
regards
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 to
nomination
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the nomination
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 of the best employee of the year as me and my colleagues want to nominate George for
this
 award.
Firstly
, by keeping his
overall
 year's performance in mind, He truly deserves to get
this
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as well as
 he had
work
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 really hard and all the parents are praised about him.
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, He is
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first
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 male early childhood educator
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in
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 our
day care
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 and he is
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an inspiration
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inspiration
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of
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 many male
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educators
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educator
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.
Moreover
, his potential to handle work pressure and always come up with accurate
resolution
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 is remarkable.
Therefore
, my team think he is the right person for
this
 appreciation. I know that there are many characteristics of employees to become
successful
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 employee.
For instance
 good communication skills, good listening, handling working
in
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 pressure
and
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doing it efficiently and effectively and working as a team member by using rightful skills and understanding. I have seen all
this
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 traits in George and I personally nominate him for
this
 award
and
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if you need any information you can contact me. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.
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Your
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 faithfully, Simran
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nomination
  • Employee of the Year
  • Work ethic
  • Dedication
  • Contribution
  • Accomplishments
  • Team player
  • Positive impact
  • Company culture
  • Leadership
  • Inspirational
  • Exceptional service
  • Recognition
  • Commendable
  • Exemplary performance
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