The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
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The line graph illustrates the global
demand
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of
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different types of
textile
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textiles
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from 1980 to 2015. Generally,
it is clear that
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polyester and
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cutton
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cotton
have the highest
number of
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demand
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,
meanwhile
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cellulosic
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and
wool
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have
the
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small number. Polyester is the first highest
demand
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of
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for
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fiber
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fibre
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in the market. It started at 5
million
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ton
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tons
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in 1980. Afterwards, it experienced a significant rise in 1998 and it had 33
million
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ton
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.
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, it had a small drop
by
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1
million
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ton
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tons
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in 2000. Over the next 15 years, it rapidly rose by 37
million
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ton
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. it reached a peak
at
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69
million
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ton
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in 2015. The second higehest
demand
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is
cutton
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. It began with the highest rate about 7
million
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ton
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tons
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in 1980.
Then
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, it
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gradually
increase
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from 1980 to 1993. It had about 20 billion
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ton
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in 1993. Afterwards, it
reamined
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remained
steady at 20 till 1995. The rate was
same
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the same
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as the
pollyester
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polyester
in 1995. Over the next 20 years, it experienced a
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fluctuation
and reached a peak at 32
million
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ton
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in 2015.
Lastly
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, the smallest numbers of
fiber
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fibre
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demand
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are
cellulosic
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and
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cutton
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cotton
.
Cellulosic
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and
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cutton
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cotton
Sutton
had 3 and 2
million
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ton
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of
demand
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in 1980. Over the next 18 years, when
wool
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slightly increased by 2
million
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ton
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tons
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,
cellulosic
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experienced a drop, by 2
million
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ton
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in 1998.
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, afterwards,
wool
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experienced a small drop and
cellulosic
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had a
steadly
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steadily
steady
increse
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increase
, from 1990 to 2015.
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the end,
Cellulosic
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stayed at 4
million
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million
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ton
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tons
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and
wool
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only
2
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had 2
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million
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of
demand
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in 2015.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 89%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words demand, cutton, cellulosic, wool, million, ton with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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