The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
The line graph illustrates the global
demand
of
different types of Change preposition
for
textile
from 1980 to 2015.
Generally, Fix the agreement mistake
textiles
it is clear that
polyester and cutton
have the highest Correct your spelling
cotton
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
demand
, meanwhile
Add a comma
meanwhile,
cellulosic
and wool
have the
small number.
Polyester is the first highest Correct article usage
a
demand
of
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for
fiber
in the market. It started at 5 Change the spelling
fibre
million
ton
in 1980. Afterwards, it experienced a significant rise in 1998 and it had 33 Fix the agreement mistake
tons
million
ton
. Fix the agreement mistake
tons
However
, it had a small drop by
1 Change preposition
of
million
ton
in 2000. Over the next 15 years, it rapidly rose by 37 Fix the agreement mistake
tons
million
ton
. it reached a peak Fix the agreement mistake
tons
at
69 Change preposition
of
million
ton
in 2015.
The second higehest Fix the agreement mistake
tons
demand
is cutton
. It began with the highest rate about 7 million
ton
in 1980. Fix the agreement mistake
tons
Then
, it gradualy
Correct your spelling
gradually
increase
from 1980 to 1993. It had about 20 billion Change the verb form
increases
ton
in 1993. Afterwards, it Fix the agreement mistake
tons
reamined
steady at 20 till 1995. The rate was Correct your spelling
remained
same
as the Correct article usage
the same
pollyester
in 1995. Over the next 20 years, it experienced a Correct your spelling
polyester
flactuation
and reached a peak at 32 Correct your spelling
fluctuation
million
ton
in 2015.
Fix the agreement mistake
tons
Lastly
, the smallest numbers of fiber
Change the spelling
fibre
demand
are cellulosic
and cutton
. Correct your spelling
cotton
Cellulosic
and cutton
had 3 and 2 Correct your spelling
cotton
Sutton
million
ton
of Fix the agreement mistake
tons
demand
in 1980. Over the next 18 years, when wool
slightly increased by 2 million
ton
, Fix the agreement mistake
tons
cellulosic
experienced a drop, by 2 million
ton
in 1998. Fix the agreement mistake
tons
However
, afterwards, wool
experienced a small drop and cellulosic
had a steadly
Correct your spelling
steadily
steady
increse
, from 1990 to 2015. Correct your spelling
increase
At
the end, Change the preposition
In
Cellulosic
stayed at 4 million
million
Remove the redundancy
apply
ton
and Fix the agreement mistake
tons
wool
only 2
Add a missing verb
had 2
million
ton
of Fix the agreement mistake
tons
demand
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