The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph shows the global demand of different types of textile from 1980 to 2015.
The line graph illustrates the global
demand
of
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different types of
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textiles
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from 1980 to 2015. Generally,
it is clear that
polyester and
cutton
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cotton
have the highest
number of
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demand
,
meanwhile
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cellulosic
and
wool
have
the
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small number. Polyester is the first highest
demand
of
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fiber
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fibre
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in the market. It started at 5
million
ton
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tons
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in 1980. Afterwards, it experienced a significant rise in 1998 and it had 33
million
ton
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tons
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.
However
, it had a small drop
by
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1
million
ton
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tons
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in 2000. Over the next 15 years, it rapidly rose by 37
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ton
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tons
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. it reached a peak
at
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69
million
ton
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tons
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in 2015. The second higehest
demand
is
cutton
. It began with the highest rate about 7
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ton
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tons
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in 1980.
Then
, it
gradualy
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gradually
increase
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from 1980 to 1993. It had about 20 billion
ton
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tons
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in 1993. Afterwards, it
reamined
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remained
steady at 20 till 1995. The rate was
same
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as the
pollyester
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polyester
in 1995. Over the next 20 years, it experienced a
flactuation
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fluctuation
and reached a peak at 32
million
ton
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tons
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in 2015.
Lastly
, the smallest numbers of
fiber
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demand
are
cellulosic
and
cutton
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cotton
.
Cellulosic
and
cutton
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cotton
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had 3 and 2
million
ton
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tons
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of
demand
in 1980. Over the next 18 years, when
wool
slightly increased by 2
million
ton
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tons
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,
cellulosic
experienced a drop, by 2
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ton
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tons
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in 1998.
However
, afterwards,
wool
experienced a small drop and
cellulosic
had a
steadly
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steadily
steady
increse
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increase
, from 1990 to 2015.
At
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the end,
Cellulosic
stayed at 4
million
million
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ton
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tons
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and
wool
only
2
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had 2
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million
ton
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tons
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of
demand
in 2015.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global demand
  • Textile industry
  • Natural fibers
  • Synthetic fibers
  • Manufacturing advancements
  • Fashion trends
  • Consumer preferences
  • Economic factors
  • Purchasing power
  • Eco-friendly materials
  • Market share
  • Production capacity
  • Polyester
  • Cotton
  • Wool
  • Nylon
  • Demand curve
  • Sustainability
  • Textile innovation
  • Fluctuations
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