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The bar chart illustrated the amount of houses constructed yearly in two cities ( Derby and Nottingham) during the period from 2000 to 2009.

The bar chart illustrated the amount of houses constructed yearly in two cities ( Derby and Nottingham) during the period from 2000 to 2009.
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The bar chart compares the
number
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 of
housing
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houses
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 built in two areas which are
Derby
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 and
Nottingham
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 during 10 years from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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, the accumulation of houses in
Derby
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 was superior to that in
Nottingham
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 in the given time since the
number
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 of that in
Derby
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 soared in 2008 ,whilst that in
Nottingham
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 sharply decreased in the same year.
According to
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 the information shown in the diagram, the figure for constructed dwellings in
Derby
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 reached a plateau from 2003 to 2007 with the
number
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 of 110. After a year, the
amount
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number
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 of new houses skyrocketed to 280.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of new housing shot up from 10 to 190 between 2006 and 2007 in
Nottingham
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.
However
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, it dived from 190 to 15 one year later and surged to 250 in 2009.
To sum up
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,
comparing
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compared
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 to
Derby
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, the need
of
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for
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 new construction in
Nottingham
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 changed dramatically in the given decade.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, derby, nottingham with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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