he table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

he table shows the percentage of people with mobile phones who use various features on their phone between 2006 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table shows data about
percentage
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the percentage
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of individuals
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who use
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smart phones
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smartphones
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according to
their various features from 2006 to 2010.
First
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First,
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af
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of
all, we can see increasing
patten
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pattern
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using
of
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apply
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every tool
exept
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except
playing games and making calls which each
droped
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dropped
non-significant just 1
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
, the table shows the least statistical increase of people
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using
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their phones for recording videos than other features,
while
taking
photo
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photos
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has become a popular activity.
Between
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Among
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mentioned activities, playing games has the most influence on
community
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the community
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from 12 to 41
percentage
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during the years. Less grow up belongs to playing music which just had 14
percentage
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per cent
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.
To sum up
, regardless
the
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of the
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rate,
using
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the use
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of all
features
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the features
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that are mentioned in
table
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the table
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have been growed
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has grown
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during
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from
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2006 to 2010.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • features
  • usage
  • between 2006 and 2010
  • trends
  • increasing
  • decreasing
  • popularity
  • basic features
  • advanced features
  • internet browsing
  • playing games
  • significant changes
  • emerging trends
  • speculate
  • comparison
  • over time
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