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The picture depicts how Islip town centre planned development.

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The picture depicts how Islip town centre planned development. There planned
a
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massive construction,
such
 as roads, buildings, housing, shops and pavement for pedestrians.
Main
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The main
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road
 in the center of town planned
demolish
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demolished
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and change
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change
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 to be pavement for pedestrians. New
road
planned
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is planned
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circlying
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circling
 the town from the west to the east replacing
countryside
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the countryside
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then
 connecting to the
road
 on the east
park
.
New
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road
 take over part of
park
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the park
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 and will
building
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build
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new
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a new
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road
on
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in
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 the south
park
link
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 to the
road
 on the north school. Shops on the north main
road
 will divided
three
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into three
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part
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, there will
develope
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developed
 bus station on the west,
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the shoping
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shoping
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shopping
center
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centre
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 will be in the middle bus station and car
park
, where
car
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the car
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park
 will be on the east. Not only
public
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a public
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 area, but
also
 two new housing planned to
build
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be built
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 next to
car
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the car
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park
, and the other one exactly in the west of
park
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the park
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. Meanwhile, The school building will remain
same
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the same
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 without any development.
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