The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the information about
howmuch
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how much
amount
of money
to
donate for Add a missing verb
was to
charity
in the UK people by the
various Correct article usage
apply
age
group
of people in two different periods in 1990 and 2010.
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groups
Overall
, above
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those above
thirty
five Correct determiner usage
the
age
group
of the british
population were more interested Change the capitalization
British
to donate
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in donating
money
to charity
as compared to the
adults.
The graph shows that there was a high Correct article usage
apply
amount
of money
was provided by the 36-50 age
group
in the Uk
in 1990 Correct your spelling
UK
while
18
to 25 Correct article usage
the 18
age
group
adults were gave
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were given
the
low Correct article usage
a
amount
as donation, at around 43% and around 17% respectively. Similarly
, people from 51- 65, it were
the second largest Change the verb form
was
age
group
was
donated to Unnecessary verb
apply
charity
, which was 35 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Likewise
, above
sixty and 18-25 Correct article usage
the above
age
group
were
donated cash almost Unnecessary verb
apply
same
, for accounted 32 per cent.
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the same
Furthermore
, in 2010, the age
group
of 51 to 65 was provided the
largest Add the preposition
with the
amount
of money
while
18
to 25 Correct article usage
the 18
age
public was the least amount
gave
to Wrong verb form
given
the
Correct article usage
apply
charity
in british
, at around 38 and 6 per cent respectively. there was a same Change the capitalization
British
amount
was spent by the two age
group
of folks Fix the agreement mistake
groups
which
above sixty and 36 to 50, for accounted 35%. Around 31 percent of Correct pronoun usage
apply
money
was spent by the 26-35 age
group
in the Uk
.Correct your spelling
UK
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, charity, age, group with synonyms.
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