The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.

The chart below gives information about on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the year 1990 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the information about
howmuch
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how much
amount
of
money
to
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was to
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donate for
charity
in the UK people by
the
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apply
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various
age
group
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groups
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of people in two different periods in 1990 and 2010.
Overall
,
above
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those above
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thirty
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the
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five
age
group
of the
british
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population were more interested
to donate
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in donating
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money
to
charity
as compared to
the
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adults. The graph shows that there was a high
amount
of
money
was provided by the 36-50
age
group
in the
Uk
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UK
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in 1990
while
18
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the 18
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to 25
age
group
adults
were gave
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were given
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the
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a
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low
amount
as donation, at around 43% and around 17% respectively.
Similarly
, people from 51- 65, it
were
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was
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the second largest
age
group
was
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donated to
charity
, which was 35
percent
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per cent
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.
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,
above
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the above
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sixty and 18-25
age
group
were
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donated cash almost
same
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the same
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, for accounted 32 per cent.
Furthermore
, in 2010, the
age
group
of 51 to 65 was provided
the
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largest
amount
of
money
while
18
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the 18
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to 25
age
public was the least
amount
gave
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given
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to
the
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apply
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charity
in
british
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, at around 38 and 6 per cent respectively. there was a same
amount
was spent by the two
age
group
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groups
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of folks
which
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apply
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above sixty and 36 to 50, for accounted 35%. Around 31 percent of
money
was spent by the 26-35
age
group
in the
Uk
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, money, charity, age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "gave" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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