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The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below compare the number of people per household* in the UK in 1981 and 2001. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
#people #household* #uk #information #features #comparisons
The charts illustrate the
amount
 of
individual
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individuals
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 per
folks
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folk
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 in the UK in two different years (1981 and 2001).
Overall
, when we compare the
number
 of people per household in 1981 and 2001 we can
seen
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see
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 that
,
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apply
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 the person who
living
Wrong verb form
live
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 alone
had
Wrong verb form
has
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 risen and all householder
amount
 except
2-person
Correct article usage
the 2-person
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 group
had
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apply
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decreased in 2001
according to
 1981.
To begin
 with, the
number
 of 6-person families has decreased,
this
amount
 was 6 in 1981
whereas
 it was 2 in 2001. The 5-person meinie was 8 in given first year
although
 it was 15 in 2001. The 4-person families
shown
Wrong verb form
showed
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 the same
amount
 risen.
Furthermore
, couple of person
number
's had increased during the 20 years. The
alone
Correct word choice
apply
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people showing the largest increment were the living. In 1981, alone
male
Correct article usage
the male
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 or female
number
 was 17
while
this quantities
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this quantity
these quantities
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had been
Wrong verb form
was
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 26 in 2001.
To sum up
, individuals preferred to live alone or live with fewer people in the
last
 given year.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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