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this owning residential buildings advantage outweighed disadvantage

#buildings #advantage
It has been widely claimed that owning residential buildings is more important than renting from
landlord
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 in some states.
This
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firstly
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 explain the reason
of
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 the case before elaborating
why
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 I consider owning the property to be a positive circumstance. To
being
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 with, it might seem reasonable for some to believe
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the claim.
This
 is
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 because they believe that procession in real estate assets might be able to give assistance to their life in
term
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 of financial perspective.
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, the price of the asset might be too significantly increasing to afford in the future because of inflation in the nation. From
this
 perspective, it is understandable why some would have the idea that being the owner of
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houses
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 might be one of
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 factors for people.
However
, I personally believe that the circumstance leads to
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 side for the
counties
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 because the higher
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 to buy houses in
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the market
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 would be one of the reasons to develop
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the economy
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 of the nation.
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, it is able to expand the market because
it
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 would be
higher
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a higher
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 rate of enormous investment and employment from employees for new construction
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projects
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 to respond to the demands in
market
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.
As a consequence
, the government would be able to take
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advantage
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this
 situation to persuade new investors to increase the growth of
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for
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 their
counties
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. In conclusion, it is undeniable to consider that processing with the housing buildings could be beneficial for the counties, especially in
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 of economic part.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses a single main idea and that ideas transition smoothly from one to the next. Use cohesive devices appropriately to support this structure.
task achievement
Your essay needs to fully address all parts of the task. Make sure to provide a balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages, and ensure that your position is clear throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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