the growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in town adn cities closing . do you agree or disagree ?

Online shopping has been increasing tremendously as compared to the past days.
However
, some
argued
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that virtual shopping will dominate all direct
shops
in
future
.
While
I do not believe that because most people like to buy
things
from
the
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direct
shops
instead
of online, purchasing from the online platform brings some
befits
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such
as
time
saving
as well as
providing many offers.
To begin
with, purchasing from
the
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virtual shopping platforms can save more
time
which means people can access and place
order
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orders
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anywhere through
the
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mobile
apps
within a fraction of
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a seconds
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seconds
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.
For example
, some online shopping
apps
are provided numerous offers and discounts in
everyday
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in
order
to they are able to impress customers to buy frequently.
In addition
,
virtual
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shopping platform has multifarious
brands item
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brand items
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in one place,
therefore
. People can compare
price
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prices
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and quality easily and
place
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placing
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order
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orders
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also
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is also
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not difficult just one click your
things
will come quickly.
Hence
, in the
future
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the local
shops
will be closed by the virtual shopping
apps
.
In contrast
, the local
shops
will not be closed by virtual shopping because the population
like
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likes
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to purchase
things
from
the directing
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direct
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shopping.
Which
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means the public considers
the
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that
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online products may be damaged, less quality and
it
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apply
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takes
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more
time
for shipping
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to ship
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.
For instance
, the local vendors give the chance to
bargaining
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the customer in
order
to
they
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apply
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attract the customer
will
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who will
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come frequently in
future
but
this
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these
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facilities are not impossible in the online shopping platform
due to
the fixed price.
Therefore
, mankind
love
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to buy
things
from their local shop
at
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apply
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now,
similarly
, in the
future
this
trend indeed will be continued.
To conclude
,
although
the
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online
shoppings
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shopping
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apps
can save
time
as well as
provide plenty
offers
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of offers
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and discounts,
the
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local
shops
give bargaining amenities to the customers
along with
mankind can check products whether
being
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are
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damaged or not.
Therefore
, I partially agree with
this
statement in the above-mentioned details.
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