Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports. Others, however, believe that everyone should have the freedom to choose whatever sports activities they like. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sports
are an imperative activity
of
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people
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lives.
when
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it comes
some
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to some
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claim that there
are
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is
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some dangerous
game
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games
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should
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that should
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be banned by the authority,
while
others opine that games should be chosen
with
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freedomly
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freedom
freedoms
whatever
sports
people
like. In
this
essay, both sides of the topic will be discussed followed by my opinion. On the one hand, supporters of some kind of adverse
sports
can cause
casualty
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, depth
wound
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wounds
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,
sometimes
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dead
also
happens
by
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the
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dangerous games like
wresting
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wrestling
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.
This
is because
of
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the
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apply
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authority
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authorities
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should
be banned
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ban
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the
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dangerous
sports
in order to
people
cannot get serious wounds and
casualty
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casualties
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and they
can
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lead a good life.
For example
,
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the wresting
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wresting
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wrestling
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game
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games
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can cause dead and
any
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body parts broken, even though, still mankind
plays
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play
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this
game
without knowing the repercussions,
therefore
, the government should take
a
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action to
banned
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ban
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this
type of dangerous
sports
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sport
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for the public
sakes
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sake
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.
On the other hand
, opponents of everyone should have a right to choose their favourite
game
whether dangerous or safe it fully depends on their choice and preference.
This
is because
of
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the government does not interfere in
this
matter, it is fully their freedom whatever
sports
activity
people
like and they do.
For instance
, when a person plays any
sports
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sport
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with full interestingly he will become a master
on
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in
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a particular
game
while
his entire lifestyle might be changed drastically as compared to the past.
Sports
activities can do for their own
interst
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interest
interests
and freedom which the public can perform effectively without any restrictions. These are the main reasons
for
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I agree that everyone should have the freedom to select any
sport
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sports
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activities whatever they like whether hard or simple.
To conclude
,
although
the dangerous
game
can bring
casualty
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casualties
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, depth
wound
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wounds
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,
any
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and any
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parts of the body broken and dead, so, the government should be banned,
sports
should be chosen
with
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freedomly
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freedom
while
the
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individuals can perform effectively without any restrictions. In my opinion, the
benefit
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benefits
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side of
people
should should be chosen
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choosing
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any
game
activities with
freedomly
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freedom
freedoms
poses always outweigh the limitations.
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