n some countries, students pay their college or university fees, while in some others, the government pay for them. Do you think the advantages that government pays the money outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now-a-days

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trend is going on for free tuition fees.In my opinion, it has more

advantage

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advantages

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then

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disadvantage

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disadvantages

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. Students of rural areas who are the children of very poor families and

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families who do not have the required job round the year, either

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have got very much talent or they are keen to learn do not get the chance to study because of their economic conditions. So in that case

tution

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tuition

free universities

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for them.

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- the first president of America

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not capable

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his fees as he

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family, if he was not able to study

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we would not get

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good president.

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, students can work part-time

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studying but there is too

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expenses today so it is very necessary for the Universities to give them

tuition free

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education so that

world

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might get a new scientist, engineer, professor, artist, doctor, politician etc. who may work miracle. And those talented people who do not get proper education

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them to the world of crimes, robbery, theft, murders etc. for the luxury life. So,

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duty of the government

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of the universities that each and every student should be taught. No one on the planet should be illiterate. And if there

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fully educated people

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the world would become heaven. So, in my opinion advantages that

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the government

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pays the fees outweigh the disadvantages is totally correct.

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The essay lacks a clear structure, including the lack of a defined introduction and conclusion. Work on structuring your essay with clear paragraphs that introduce the topic, develop the argument, and conclude the discussion.

task achievement

Ensure that your essay remains focused on the task. The question asks for a discussion on whether government-paid tuition has more advantages than disadvantages. Ensure that both sides are discussed, and provide a clear response.

task achievement

You need to use examples effectively to support your main points. The example of 'the first president of America' is not relevant as it does not directly relate to the issue of government funding of university fees.

coherence cohesion

Be careful with your grammar and punctuation. Work on sentence structure and avoid run-on sentences. Proofread your essay to correct errors.

task achievement

Develop your ideas more fully. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea with support. The essay needs more development in terms of explaining and justifying the arguments presented.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

244 words

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