n some countries, students pay their college or university fees, while in some others, the government pay for them. Do you think the advantages that government pays the money outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now-a-days

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this

trend is going on for free tuition fees.In my opinion, it has more

advantage

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advantages

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then

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disadvantage

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disadvantages

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. Students of rural areas who are the children of very poor families and

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apply

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families who do not have the required job round the year, either

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have got very much talent or they are keen to learn do not get the chance to study because of their economic conditions. So in that case

tution

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tuition

free universities

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boon

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for them.

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- the first president of America

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not capable

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his fees as he

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to a

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peasant

family, if he was not able to study

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we would not get

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good president.

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, students can work part-time

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studying but there is too

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expenses today so it is very necessary for the Universities to give them

tuition free

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education so that

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might get a new scientist, engineer, professor, artist, doctor, politician etc. who may work miracle. And those talented people who do not get proper education

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them to the world of crimes, robbery, theft, murders etc. for the luxury life. So,

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duty of the government

as well as

of the universities that each and every student should be taught. No one on the planet should be illiterate. And if there

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fully educated people

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the world would become heaven. So, in my opinion advantages that

government

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the government

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pays the fees outweigh the disadvantages is totally correct.

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