n some countries, students pay their college or university fees, while in some others, the government pay for them. Do you think the advantages that government pays the money outweigh the disadvantages?

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Now-a-days
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Nowadays

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trend is going on for free tuition fees.In my opinion, it has more
advantage
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advantages

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then
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disadvantage
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disadvantages

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. Students of rural areas who are the children of very poor families and
the
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apply

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families who do not have the required job round the year, either
they
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apply

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have got very much talent or they are keen to learn do not get the chance to study because of their economic conditions. So in that case
tution
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tuition

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free universities
is
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are

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boon
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a boon

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for them.
Example
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- the first president of America
is
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was

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not capable
to pay
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of paying

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his fees as he
belongs
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belonged

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to a
peasent
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peasant

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family, if he was not able to study
then
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we would not get
the
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a

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good president.
However
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, students can work part-time
while
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studying but there is too
much
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many

It appears that the quantifier much does not fit with the countable noun expenses. Consider changing the quantifier or the noun.

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expenses today so it is very necessary for the Universities to give them
tuition free
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tuition-free

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education so that
world
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the world

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might get a new scientist, engineer, professor, artist, doctor, politician etc. who may work miracle. And those talented people who do not get proper education
leads
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lead

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them to the world of crimes, robbery, theft, murders etc. for the luxury life. So,
this
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the
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duty of the government
as well as
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of the universities that each and every student should be taught. No one on the planet should be illiterate. And if there
is
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are

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fully educated people
then
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the world would become heaven. So, in my opinion advantages that
government
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the government

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pays the fees outweigh the disadvantages is totally correct.

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The essay lacks a clear structure, including the lack of a defined introduction and conclusion. Work on structuring your essay with clear paragraphs that introduce the topic, develop the argument, and conclude the discussion.
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Ensure that your essay remains focused on the task. The question asks for a discussion on whether government-paid tuition has more advantages than disadvantages. Ensure that both sides are discussed, and provide a clear response.
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You need to use examples effectively to support your main points. The example of 'the first president of America' is not relevant as it does not directly relate to the issue of government funding of university fees.
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Be careful with your grammar and punctuation. Work on sentence structure and avoid run-on sentences. Proofread your essay to correct errors.
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Develop your ideas more fully. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea with support. The essay needs more development in terms of explaining and justifying the arguments presented.

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