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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features，and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given chart illustrates the numerical information about the amount of tourists visiting a
caribbean
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Caribbean
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 island during a particular period from 2010 to 2017. in general, the figure
of
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for
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 tourists
consistantly
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consistently
 increased during the given period of seven years. And, the
datas
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data
 of two kinds of visiting styles to travellers
grown
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grew
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 in 2017 compared with the first year. it is obvious that there were an increasing number of people who went to
caribbean
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Caribbean
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 island over 7 years, and the data ascended from 1
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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 in 2010 to 3.5
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millions
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million
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of
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apply
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visitors
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, and the speed of increase was
extremly
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extremely
 rapid. more and more
Visitors
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 were interested in staying on cruise ships, except in 2010, there was a slight drop
for
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in
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 quantities of tourists, the number of
visitors
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 who had those visiting
behaviors
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behaviours
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were
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was
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in
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apply
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a
raising
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rising
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 trend throughout
whole
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the whole
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 period of time. As for
visitors
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 staying on
island
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the island
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, the data experienced a fluctuation
which
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apply
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starting with 0.75
milions
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millions
million
 of
visitors
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 in the course of two years,
then
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 up to 1.5
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millions
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million
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 from 2012 to 2015 and
have
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apply
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a
little
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small
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 decline in 2016 with 1.25
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millions
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million
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, following
rebound
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a rebound
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 to 1.5
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millions
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million
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 till
end
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the end
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 of 2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words millions, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • gradual increase
  • sharp decline
  • steady growth
  • plateau
  • seasonal variation
  • external influences
  • tourist influx
  • sustainable tourism
  • economic impact
  • hospitality industry
  • travel restrictions
  • visitor statistics
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