The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

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gender in Australia in the year 1995.

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it is clear that

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females held the highest proportion in Arts & Humanities, whilst males mainly participated in Engineering. Looking in detail, Arts & Humanities command the biggest share with just under a fifth being women. The second-most chosen subject was Health as 15% of females enrolled in

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major. The remaining fields of study are Accounting & Economics, Education, Business Studies, Maths & Science, Computing, and Engineering saw a moderate decrease, which is approximately 11%, 10%, 9%, 7%, 4%, and 2%, respectively.

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, males majorly constituted its ratio in Engineering, which was up to just below 20%. Arts, Human Studies, Maths, Sciences, Accounting, and Economics are similar in data and held the second place in the most studied courses by men, which are around 13% of all. The leftovers are Health, Education, Business, and Computing are

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less than a tenth.

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The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

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