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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
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These pie charts compare the average amount of
energy
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used by Six categories of water heating, heating, refrigeration, cooling, lighting, and other appliances and the percentage of household
greenhouse
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gas
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that is
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 produced in Australia. At first glance can be understood that refrigeration, other appliances, and lighting use less
energy
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 but each of them emissions twice time
greenhouse
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gas
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 more than the amount of
energy
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 usage. Just heating tools use more
energy
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 but manufacture less detrimental
gas
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.
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 the flow chart, it can be seen that households which are utilized for heating
purpose
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 are less harmful than others
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 they give a lot of
energy
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(42%) but a little
greenhouse
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gas
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releases
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 into the air(15%). water heating and cooling have approximately equal amounts of
energy
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 consumption and harmful
gas
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 production just less than a third and a negligible amount at 2% respectively. The figures for
energy
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 consumption by refrigeration, lighting, and other appliances are 7%, 15%, and 4% respectively which are manufacturing 14%, 8%, and 28%
greenhouse
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gas
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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