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The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process of growing and preparing pineapples and pineapple products. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given process depicts how pineapples are planted and prepared before going to the market.
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, there are 3 main stages that
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 kind of fruit grows through. After being harvested, it will be classified into 3 size groups and each of them will undergo different ways of procession, which include 3 or 4 smaller steps.
Initially
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, pineapples are planted under 28-to-30-degree-celsius weather, with a distance of 26cm between 2 plants. After 7 months, they will be added some chemicals, followed by a period of 5 months resting.
Finally
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, pineapples reached an average height of 30cm and weight of 3km, being able to be harvested. After that, they are rinsed in water before being categorized into 3 sizes. They are all going to be peeled, apart from the biggest category which
are
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is

The plural verb are does not appear to agree with the singular subject the biggest category. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 waxed
instead
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Consequently
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while
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medium sized
Add a hyphen
medium-sized

It seems that medium sized is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

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 fruits are processed and canned, producers put the smallest ones into an extractor to have pineapple juice. Meanwhile, fruits which have large sizes are about to be loaded into many cargoes after the waxing stage.
Lastly
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, some ships will carry these freights to distribute them to different areas.

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