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The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same to periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 to what extent the satisfaction level of
vistiting
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visiting
 Ashdown Museum has altered considering visitors' opinions in two periods
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before and after rehabilitation and renovation. Looking at the
overall
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 that the volume of visits after
refurbishment
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the refurbishment
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 has
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 up.
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, the majority of visitors evaluated the repairs and redecoration positively giving satisfied and very
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satisfied
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. In terms of satisfaction level, the number of individuals who were satisfied and very satisfied after
renovation
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 has increased sharply from 15% and 40% to 35% and 40%,
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respectively
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 increased satisfaction level may be interfered
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 considering the upward trend of the number of visitors which
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 climbed from 74000 at the initial form to 92000 persons after reconstruction. In line with increased desirability, dissatisfaction statistics
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 declined from 40% and 10% for dissatisfied and very dissatisfied clusters to 15% and 5%.
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 of
vistors
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visitors
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