The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The Table Below Shows the Numbers of Visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives details on to what extent the satisfaction level of visiting Ashdown Museum has altered considering
visitors
' opinions in two periods
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before and after rehabilitation and renovation. Looking at the
overall
perspective, it is apparent that the volume of visits after the refurbishment has gone up.
Moreover
, the majority of
visitors
evaluated the repairs and redecoration positively giving satisfied and very satisfied feedback. In terms of satisfaction level, the number of individuals who were satisfied and very satisfied after renovation has increased sharply from 15% and 40% to 35% and 40%, respectively.
This
increased satisfaction level may be interfered
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considering the upward trend of the number of
visitors
which has climbed from 74000 at the initial form to 92000 persons after reconstruction. In line with increased desirability, dissatisfaction statistics have declined from 40% and 10% for dissatisfied and very dissatisfied clusters to 15% and 5%.
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of
visitors
have not registered any feedback.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor numbers
  • satisfaction levels
  • very satisfied
  • satisfied
  • neither satisfied nor dissatisfied
  • dissatisfied
  • very dissatisfied
  • survey results
  • comparison
  • impact
  • effectiveness
  • visitor experience
  • overall improvement
  • increase/decrease in visitors
  • positive feedback
  • negative feedback
  • visitor survey
  • survey period
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