The diagram shows the life cycle of the Zebrafish

The diagram shows the life cycle of the Zebrafish
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram shows the life cycle of the Zebrafish
The diagram below provides information about the life process of fish.
Overall
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, the process is cyclical in shape starting from the time it lays eggs, develops of trunk, growth pigment cells and
finally
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becomes an adult.
To begin
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with, the adult fish first resides in a green area for three months before laying eggs.
This
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consists of cells and yolk. After five minutes, it developed into a zygote. Afterwards, a cleavage phase appeared which occurred after forty-five minutes.
This
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then
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grows into thousands of cells and later epiboly and gastrula stages begin after two hours. At
this
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stage, segmentation begins after eight hours.
At the end
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of the previous period, the trunk developed.
This
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is when the matured egg branched into the tail and eye and
this
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happened during the hatching period which occurred in sixteen hours.
Finally
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, pigmentation of the cell matures during the larval stage which occurred in two days.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally".
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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