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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram gives information about the process of making carbonated drinks. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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Presented
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 diagram illustrates the data of producing carbonated soda process.
Overall
, carbonated drinks go through different stages before it comes to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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.
To begin
 with, the first
stage
 is
named
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called
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 "
Water
 cleaning" where raw
water
 comes
to
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into
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filter
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a filter
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 and goes to
water
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the water
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 softener and takes chemicals.
Then
 by using
pump
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the pump
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water
 gets into
stage
 2 where
water
 gets heating evaporation and carbonation throughout electric heaters and cooling
pipe
Fix the agreement mistake
pipes
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. Carbon dioxide makes
water
 more carbonated. After it gets enough carbon dioxide it drops into
Stage
 3 Mixing. In 3rd
stage
, carbonated
water
 reaches
mixing
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the mixing
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 tank which is used to distribute
water
 into 3 sections, colouring, syrup and flavor.
Water
 residue goes by
filter
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the filter
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 into 4th
Stage
 and it
distribute
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distributes
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 to bottles and cans. Before it gets to the
last
stage
, it must
be pack
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be packed
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 into boxes. When
its
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it's
it is
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 packed into boxes, trucks take
away
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it away
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 and
delivers
Correct subject-verb agreement
deliver
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to
Correct pronoun usage
it to
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Supermarket
Correct article usage
the Supermarket
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 where it can be
consumpted
Correct your spelling
consumed
 by people.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words stage, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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