The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

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The data provided by Australia's tertiary educational

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above demonstrated the distribution of male and female

students

signed up for different fields of study in 1995.

Overall

, Engineering had the highest number of male

students

while

Arts & Humanities field was

favored

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by the majority of the girls. In fact, the proportion of male

students

registered for Engineering and female counterparts in Arts

& Humanities

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and humanities

were approximately equal.

However

, there was a significant difference in Engineering where the percentage of male

students

was almost 5 times higher than female ones. As in Computing, a similar trend was demonstrated as 10% of male learners outweigh the 4% shown from the learners of the opposite sex.

Likewise

, the doubling figure was shown in males compared to females with roughly 14% and 7% respectively.

On the other hand

, some subject areas provide a more equal distribution between the two genders

such

as Business Studies where the difference was relatively insubstantial,

while

others present considerate biases from female

students

such

as education and health. The least

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subject by female

students

was Engineering with only around 2%

while

for males it was Health at around 4%.

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The chart below contains information provided by Australia's tertiary institutions about the percentage of male and female students who enrolled in different subjects in 1995.

The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

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2.Many parents in Vietnam invest heavily into their child’s education hoping for the best. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?