The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
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The bar graph illustrates 10 countries that
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the most electrical
production
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and
consumption
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in 2014.
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, it is noticeable that
China
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produces
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electricity
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the most. Meanwhile,
China
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also
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consume
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electricity
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the most. The majority of countries have the
rate
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of electrical
production
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more
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than
consumption
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. The
rank
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of
consumption
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and
production
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is slightly different as Germany produces more
electricity
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than the country before its
rank
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. In the first
rank
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of
production
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,
China
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had the highest
rate
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of
production
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of
electricity
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in 2014, accounting for 5,398
billion
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kWh
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. It was followed by
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States with 4,099
billion
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kWh
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. Between the second and third
place
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, there was a big gap between them as Russia who got the third
place
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produced merely 1,057 in that year. As the
rank
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was lower, the manufacturing of
electricity
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also
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declined. Korea who got the tenth
place
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produced only 485.1
billion
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kWh
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in 2014. Looking at the
rate
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of
consumption
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,
China
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remained
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place
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at 5,322
billion
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kWh
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, followed by
US
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the US
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at 3,866
billion
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kWh
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. Interestingly, the change occurred a little in terms of
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as the
rate
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of
consumption
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of
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Germany was 582.5 which was higher than
Canada
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in Canada
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.
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, in terms of
consumption
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, Germany would move up to sixth
place
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, consumption, china, electricity, rate, rank, billion, kwh, place with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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