The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The bar graph illustrates 10 countries that
has
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had
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the most electrical
production
and
consumption
in 2014.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
China
produces
the
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electricity
the most. Meanwhile,
China
also
consume
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consumes
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electricity
the most. The majority of countries have the
rate
of electrical
production
more
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than
consumption
. The
rank
of
consumption
and
production
is slightly different as Germany produces more
electricity
than the country before its
rank
. In the first
rank
of
production
,
China
had the highest
rate
of
production
of
electricity
in 2014, accounting for 5,398
billion
kWh
. It was followed by
United
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the United
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States with 4,099
billion
kWh
. Between the second and third
place
, there was a big gap between them as Russia who got the third
place
produced merely 1,057 in that year. As the
rank
was lower, the manufacturing of
electricity
also
declined. Korea who got the tenth
place
produced only 485.1
billion
kWh
in 2014. Looking at the
rate
of
consumption
,
China
remained
first
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place
at 5,322
billion
kWh
, followed by
US
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the US
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at 3,866
billion
kWh
. Interestingly, the change occurred a little in terms of
rank
as the
rate
of
consumption
of
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Germany was 582.5 which was higher than
Canada
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in Canada
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.
Thus
, in terms of
consumption
, Germany would move up to sixth
place
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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